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percentage of people in the USA who often ate fast food at the restaurant between 2003 and 2013

The chart illustrated the numbers of the percentage of
people
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 in the USA who often ate fast
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 at the restaurant between 2003 and 2013. The charts provide us
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common data, which is the
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 of the USA who eat in the restaurant bear almost the same comparison between 2003 and 2013. If we look at the all graphs of 2003,
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 we noticed at least 4% of the US
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 eat every day at restaurants.
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, 5% of
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 don't eat fast
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 any day. 17% eat several
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 a
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, 31% eat at least once a
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, 30%
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 once or twice a
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, and
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 13%
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 enjoy it a few
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 a year. Without something different, we have noticed almost the same data
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 between 2006 and 2013. It shows that 3%
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 of the US
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 eat fast
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 at restaurants every day, and 4% never eat anytime. Between 2006 and 2013
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 15% of
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 eat a few
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 a year. In 2006, 20% of
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 often ate in a
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, 33% once a
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, and 25% eat once or twice a month while in 2013 that number is 33%. 28% of
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 eat once a
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, and 16% of the USA
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 eat fast
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 at the restaurant several
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 a
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.

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