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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

One of the most important things/factors in applying for a
job
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 from a worker’s perspective is
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 satisfaction. Almost every person in society asks for a calm and delightful
job
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 environment
that is
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 a fair and right demand. There are several things employers can do in order to
make
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create
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 a pleasant environment for
workers
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. First and
the most
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foremost
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 is the financial safety they can provide with annual profits and monthly rewards for employees to make them feel hyped up and appreciated.
Also
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, some other actions like making a mini café or preparing a lunch and dinner room can
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 a better and more friendly bond between co-
workers
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 so they can enjoy their
time
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 together. Another action that can make a tangible change in the workplace atmosphere is to celebrate different occasions like someone’s birthday or a
group
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 success and achievement. In
this
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 way, the office would be a more enjoyable place and the amount of tension and stress of the
workers
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 would decrease during the
time
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. For instance, after a long
time
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 of hard work
for
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 a special project, all
workers
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 can use a day off and spend
the
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apply
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time
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 with their families or they can use a break to celebrate the success. In conclusion, there are simple actions that can be taken to make the
job
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 more satisfying for employers.
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 some actions can not be done during times when a hard situation lies ahead, it is not unrealistic to meet these needs of
workers
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 to make the
job
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 environment more satisfying for everyone.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job satisfaction
  • wellbeing
  • contribute
  • meaningful work
  • work-life balance
  • career progression
  • workplace environment
  • recognition
  • constructive feedback
  • compensation
  • benefits
  • job security
  • autonomy
  • skills match
  • interests match
  • variety
  • challenge
  • economic conditions
  • labor market
  • individual expectations
  • job role
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