Governments and big companies should work together to reverse environmental damage, rather than expecting individuals to take responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Most
people
do not pay much attention
about
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environmental
issues
. It is completely true that
people
should take
this
problem more seriously in order to prevent disasters in the future.
However
, they do not take
this
threat seriously enough. One of the reasons why most
people
do not
care
about environmental
issues
is because they do not affect humans directly in daily life. Simply because
people
can not see where or when global warming nor pollution
occur
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.
In other words
, environmental
issues
affect
people
indirectly day by day indirectly through the air,
water
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and water
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( which humans can not see using normal eyes).
For example
, the majority of
people
will
care
about developing infrastructure which improves the effectiveness of working rather than having concerns about global warming or pollution. So,
although
some
people
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concern
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about environmental
issues
, their motivation just wanes out over time, and these problems keep happening.
Second
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reason is the insufficient
of
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apply
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government
in taking
care
of
environment
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the environment
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. At some points,
government
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did give some solutions but they did not affect well in
impoving
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improving
environmently
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environmentally
.
In addition
that
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government
did not convey to
citizen
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citizens
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about protecting
environment
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the environment
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(education) through
media
or
school
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schools
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popularly so
people
are not inclined to
care
enough about environmental
issues
.
For instance
, if a certain topic, no matter how superficial, is presented massively in the
media
,
people
will read, talk and
care
about
and
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it and
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vice versa, if the
government
and
media
neglect handling a certain issue,
people
might not have the chance to know about the matter.
Consequently
,
this
makes
people
unknowing of the seriousness of these troubles. In conclusion, most
people
do not pay much attention
about
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environmental
issues
because
people
only prioritize their daily life obstacles and the
lack
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lacking
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role
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of role
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of
government
and
media
in protecting
environment
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the environment
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