To what extent has the traditional male role changed in the last 20 years? Many people believe that women make better parenting than men and that this is why they have the greater role in raising children in most societies. Others claim that men are just as good as women at parenting. Write an essay expressing your point of view. Give reasons for your answer.
There are split opinions about the role of men which has
turn
in Change the verb form
turned
last
20 years. Some Correct article usage
the last
believes
that Change the verb form
believe
females
have better parenting skills compare
to males, whereas another group of thinkers support both have similar skills Wrong verb form
compared
of
parenting. Change preposition
in
However
, both has
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
its
own pros and cons. Correct pronoun usage
their
Therefore
, before commenting on my decision, both the
opinion would be discussed.
Examining the former opinion, the primary arguments the supporters would put forward is Correct article usage
apply
majority
of Add an article
the majority
a majority
females
are working today and they have work family
balance skills. Add a hyphen
work-family
This
is because,
they know their roles and Remove the comma
apply
responsiblity
for their Correct your spelling
responsibility
children
and they have capability
to take care of their Change the article
the capability
love
ones while playing a professional role Replace the word
loved
on
their job. Change preposition
in
In addition
, they also
believes
thatChange the verb form
believe
,
most of the Remove the comma
apply
Correct your spelling
women
women's
womens
are multitalented they have Correct your spelling
women
ability
to perform multiple Change the article
the ability
work
at times. Change to a plural noun
works
For example
, a single mother
have various obligations Fix the agreement mistake
mothers
such
as to drop
their Change the verb form
dropping
children
for
school, Change preposition
off for
prepare
food, Wrong verb form
preparing
also
go to work
to earn money, purchase
Wrong verb form
purchasing
grocery
etc without any help Fix the agreement mistake
groceries
of
anyone they perform everything Change preposition
from
with
their own.
Change preposition
on
On the contrary
, the later
view Correct your spelling
latter
suggest
thatChange the verb form
suggests
,
nowadays Remove the comma
apply
huge
number of males are capable to perform all roles of Change the article
a huge
the huge
mother
in Correct article usage
a mother
Correct your spelling
children's
children
childrens
life but the ratio is still very less Change to a genitive case
children's
comparitvely
Correct your spelling
comparatively
females
. Change preposition
to females
For instance
, if a female died after marriage so it is very common that men get
married what if he has Fix the infinitive
to get
Correct your spelling
children
childrens
. In the reverse Correct your spelling
children
scenerio
, if a male will die, women will think Correct your spelling
scenario
number
of times Change the article
a number
the number
for
Change preposition
of
second
marriage because of their children
. In fact, she start
Change the verb form
starts
work
to raise their kids whether the Wrong verb form
working
work
type is professional or any kind small
Change preposition
of small
work
.
To conclude and give my opinion, I would say that females
are still more capable in
parenting and the most ideal than men. In Change preposition
of
a
big picture, Correct article usage
the
this
would be because a
Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
children
also
want their mother's love after their birth and only she has that love that male
Fix the agreement mistake
males
never
able to give their Add a missing verb
are never
Correct your spelling
children
childrens
.Correct your spelling
children
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