To what extent has the traditional male role changed in the last 20 years? Many people believe that women make better parenting than men and that this is why they have the greater role in raising children in most societies. Others claim that men are just as good as women at parenting. Write an essay expressing your point of view. Give reasons for your answer.

There are split opinions about the role of men which has
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in
last
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the last
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20 years. Some
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that
females
have better parenting skills
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to males, whereas another group of thinkers support both have similar skills
of
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in
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parenting.
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, both
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its
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own pros and cons.
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, before commenting on my decision, both
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opinion would be discussed. Examining the former opinion, the primary arguments the supporters would put forward is
majority
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the majority
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of
females
are working today and they have
work family
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balance skills.
This
is because
,
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they know their roles and
responsiblity
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responsibility
for their
children
and they have
capability
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the capability
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to take care of their
love
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loved
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ones while playing a professional role
on
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in
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their job.
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, they
also
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that
,
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most of the
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women
women's
womens
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women
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are multitalented they have
ability
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the ability
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to perform multiple
work
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works
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at times.
For example
, a single
mother
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mothers
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have various obligations
such
as
to drop
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dropping
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their
children
for
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off for
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school,
prepare
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preparing
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food,
also
go to
work
to earn money,
purchase
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purchasing
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grocery
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groceries
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etc without any help
of
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from
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anyone they perform everything
with
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on
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their own.
On the contrary
, the
later
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latter
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view
suggest
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that
,
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apply
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nowadays
huge
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number of males are capable to perform all roles of
mother
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a mother
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in
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children's
children
childrens
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children's
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life but the ratio is still very less
comparitvely
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comparatively
females
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to females
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.
For instance
, if a female died after marriage so it is very common that men
get
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married what if he has
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children
childrens
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children
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. In the reverse
scenerio
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scenario
, if a male will die, women will think
number
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a number
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of times
for
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of
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second
marriage because of their
children
. In fact, she
start
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starts
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work
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working
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to raise their kids whether the
work
type is professional or any kind
small
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of small
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work
. To conclude and give my opinion, I would say that
females
are still more capable
in
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of
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parenting and the most ideal than men. In
a
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big picture,
this
would be because
a
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apply
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children
also
want their mother's love after their birth and only she has that love that
male
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males
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never
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are never
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able to give their
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children
childrens
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children
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.
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