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Some people believe that women should play an equal role as men in a country's police force or military force such as the army while others think women are not suitable for this kind of jobs. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Today, an increasing number of female folks are voluntarily seeking employment opportunities in the police and armed forces, while most people argue that
this
 is not ideal, a good number
suggest
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 that
this
 should be encouraged. In my opinion, women ought to take up similar positions in the force just as their male colleagues. Nowadays, gender roles are going into extension as roles and no longer taken based on an individual's sex and I agree with
this
. Females just like men are supposed to be allowed to choose any job of their choice whether police or army without any form of prejudice once they possess the required skill.
In other words
, the basic skills required for the job should be assessed on an individual basis not based on whether the applicant is male or female.
For example
, an athletic female would do better in the military than an obsessed man. Another reason why
this
 category of people should be allowed to choose their career in the military is that women could handle some unit of the decision more than men, and they would do better with juvenile criminals. The uniformed jobs require more than just physical strength to be carried out.
On the other hand
, it is often believed that women should not undertake these duties as they are naturally procreative
that is
 they get pregnant and carry the fetus in their womb for nine months and
this
 can be a setback in their career.
Also
, they are not supposed to do rigorous activities as it can induce premature birth.
Furthermore
,
this
 gender is expected by society to stay at home to nurture and raise the children after birth and the police jobs may not allow them to do
this
 primary call effectively
hence
 the children may not be taken care of effectively. In conclusion, while people's opinions may vary, I think that females should work shoulder-to-shoulder with their male counterparts

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • equality
  • capability
  • inherent
  • high-stress situations
  • diverse perspectives
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • traditional views
  • gender roles
  • inclusive opportunities
  • role models
  • tactical advantages
  • intelligence gathering
  • negotiators
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