Many countries are experiencing population growth and need more homes. Should these new houses be constructed in existing cities or should new towns be built in the countryside?

Nowadays,countries facing
a high population problems
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and
increase
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house
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facilities .In
this
essay I will discuss the main problem of
increasing
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the increasing
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population to find
location
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a location
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in both the cities and villages,
i
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believe that government should
built
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houses
in
countryside
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the countryside
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area
On the one hand,there are many reasons why authorities should not be constructed new
appartment
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apartment
in cities
area
.
Firstly
,in urban
areas
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people
are
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live in the
suffocatrd
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suffocated
places .
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,there
are
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a lot of
appartment
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apartment
in the developing
area
and no land left in that places to
built
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some new
house
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for
new
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a new
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generation .
Secondly
, pollution
are
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also
increasing in cities
area
which
affect
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on
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the
people
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health
On the other hand
,I personally think that remote
areas
are the best place to make new
houses
.The
first
reason is that a lot of space
are
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available in that
areas
and all grocery items are available in
the villages
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the area of the village
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area
. Another reason is that
,
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it
also
helpfull
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helpful
for countryside
areas
if
government
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built new
houses
in those places
then
, they
also
make a lot of
another
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stuff
such
as
,
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hospitals , roads and
another main things
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another main thing
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To conclude,
i
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would like to reiterate that
find
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the location of
houses
for
increasing
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the increasing
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population is the main problem of many countries ,
i
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believe that both the efforts of government and individuals
this
problem can be tacked.
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