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Some say that when a person achieves success in their job, it means that he/she is selfish and doesn’t care about others. Do you agree or disagree?

#say #person #success #job #doesn’t #care
A common opinion is that
people
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succeed in their professional life are always egoistic and does not look at others. I suppose that it is not always true, there are individuals who
achieves
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succcess
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success
 at work but are polite and likeable.
Firstly
, a lot of
people
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posision
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position
 are often very hardworking and spend more hours at work than
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is required. They want to prove that they are involved and good
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enough
 to get
promotion
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a promotion
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.
This
 type of
workers
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do
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 their best and
try
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 to take the
efford
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effort
 in new tasks. In many
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situations
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 they know what they afford and know their own value.
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 is the reason why their colleagues may think about them as selfish. In my
opinion
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 it can be confused with
self confidence
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.
On the other
hand
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 there are
people
 for whom the most important is
career
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a career
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 and
do
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 everything to achieve their goals even at the expense of others. They can not work in
team
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becasue
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because
 they care only about their path to success.
This
 can be one of
main
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 problems why
upstart
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are
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 disliked. To summarise, In my
opinion
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on
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this
 statement is not black or white. There are
people
 who are good at what they do and they are aware of it. Most coworkers have a problem with that because they are jealous.
Howewer
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However
 there are
people
 who do everything to achieve success in their job but it is not a rule.
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