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More and more people are working from home rather than at the workplaces. Some people say this will bring benefits to the workers and their families, but others think it will bring stress to the home. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays because f growing
technology
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 working from
home
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 has become more common among workers.
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, some individuals think
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 development is really helpful for employees and their families. While
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 others think they bring
work
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 stress
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 their
home
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. I am going to interpret both of these views and in the
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ed
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 I am going to give my own opinions on examples that I am going to discuss. To start with,
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 development in
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 beneficially impacts all
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humans
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human kind
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 worldwide. To give an example, employees who have
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 long distance from their
home
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 to their
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work place
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 now they can easily do their job Infront of their laptop. Not only
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 action helps
people
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 to
work
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 in their comfortable house but
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, they help the environment as well by not using privet cars.
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,
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technology
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 gives an opportunity for applicants who are not native to the country, they can have projects from other countries without
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 there.
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,
people
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 can
work
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 and earn their
wage
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 without missing their
family
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families
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 and children.
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, others think
home
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 working has some disadvantages.
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, some individuals think
people
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 who
work
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 in their house
they
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can bring the
work
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in to
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 their house and
this
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 action directly impacts the relations between spouses.
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, new statistics illustrate that 80% of family problems
are signify
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to
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 their
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workplace
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work place
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workplace
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.
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,
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 we cannot underestimate the importance of
this
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technology
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,
people
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 should learn how to separate working life
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 real life. To sum up, in my
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this
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technology
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 and development s very helpful for all
human kind
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humankind
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. The point is that individuals should learn how to use it in good and beneficially ways.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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