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The shortage of housing in big cities can cause severe consequences. Only government action can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, there is a tremendous increase in population in large metropolitan areas due to people moving for job opportunities or easy access to urban amenities. Because of
the
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 reasons, young generations who are about to start a family will find it difficult for housing
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. I agree that governing bodies are solely responsible for
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Firstly
, the shortage of housing
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severe
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 effect on real-estate industries. The housing price will be competitive as there is huge demand. Home buyers
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 likely to pay twice as much of the price for a run-down household just to secure from competitors. Authorities should step in with professional real-estate evaluators so that there would not be
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hike
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 in housing prices.
Secondly
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working class
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 families would move away from big cities and stay in regional suburbs for affordable living.
As a result
, their daily commute to big
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cities
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cites
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 for work would create traffic congestion on
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highway
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 unnecessarily. Government should encourage people to take public transportation and make them more reliable and efficient.
Thirdly
, if
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 is
difficult
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to
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 housing , council rentals should
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.
In addition
, regulating authorities. One thing they could do is to build
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 where more people are able to obtain common
household
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such
 as apartments or studios according to their
need
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. In conclusion, solving
housing
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 crisis in major cities is not a walk in the park and there are few things government should do
such
 as deploying professional evaluators ,
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 public transport and building skyscrapers. I believe
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we should do it together now to avoid severe consequences. Personally, I would like to suggest
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 should educate young families and retire to have
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 understanding of efficient housing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • public housing
  • overcrowding
  • affordable housing
  • rent control
  • property market
  • infrastructure development
  • sustainable living
  • rural-urban migration
  • real estate regulations
  • zoning laws
  • bureaucracy
  • gentrification
  • economic disparity
  • housing policy
  • social welfare
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