The shortage of housing in big cities can cause severe consequences. Only government action can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In recent years, there is a tremendous increase in population in large metropolitan areas due to people moving for job opportunities or easy access to urban amenities. Because of
the
reasons, young generations who are about to start a family will find it difficult for housing Correct your spelling
these
need
. I agree that governing bodies are solely responsible for Fix the agreement mistake
needs
this
matter and in this
essay I will support my opinion with examples.
Firstly
, the shortage of housing have
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has
severe
effect on real-estate industries. The housing price will be competitive as there is huge demand. Home buyers Add an article
a severe
most
likely to pay twice as much of the price for a run-down household just to secure from competitors. Authorities should step in with professional real-estate evaluators so that there would not be Add a missing verb
are most
unnecessary
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an unnecessary
hike
in housing prices.
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hikes
Secondly
, Add a hyphen
working-class
working class
families would move away from big cities and stay in regional suburbs for affordable living. Add a hyphen
working-class
As a result
, their daily commute to big Correct your spelling
cities
cites
for work would create traffic congestion on Correct your spelling
cities
Correct article usage
the highway
highway
unnecessarily. Government should encourage people to take public transportation and make them more reliable and efficient.
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highways
Thirdly
, if there
is Change the word
it
difficult
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difficulty
to
housing , council rentals should Change preposition
in
also
be another alternatives
. Replace the adjective
another alternative
other alternatives
In addition
, regulating authorities. One thing they could do is to build sky scrapers
where more people are able to obtain common Correct your spelling
skyscrapers
household
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households
such
as apartments or studios according to their need
.
In conclusion, solving Fix the agreement mistake
needs
housing
crisis in major cities is not a walk in the park and there are few things government should do Add an article
the housing
such
as deploying professional evaluators , improved
public transport and building skyscrapers. I believe Wrong verb form
improving
,
we should do it together now to avoid severe consequences. Personally, I would like to suggest Remove the comma
apply
government
should educate young families and retire to have Add an article
the government
better
understanding of efficient housing.Add an article
a better
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