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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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It is believed by people in various countries, that
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poportion
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proportion
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 of money should be spent
for
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 constructing new railway lines, interconnecting cities through means of fast trains.
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, another opinion is that,
same
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 amount should be spent on public
transportation
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. I strongly believe that public
transports
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transport
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 should be upgraded as it is the most common way of
transportation
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 among people.
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 with, there are various means of public
transportation
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 like
buses
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, taxis,
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and autorickshaws
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. All these means of
transportation
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 are mainly used by economically weaker
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, as they are
budget friendly
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 to them. The frequency of
buses
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 operating
from
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past
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the past
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 many years has gown down. Money should be spent on providing
public
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the public
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 with modernized sitting arrangements in
buses
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 having air conditioning.
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, the government should
also
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 increase the number of
buses
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 connecting various places
of
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 the city. Talking about the railway system, which connects cities,
are
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 one of the fastest means of
transportation
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.
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, with
this
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advantage
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their
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comes a drawback that they are costlier than public
transportation
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 and
hence
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 not affordable
by
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 economically backward classes.
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, setting up more number of trains despite
of
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less
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 users is not advisable to spend money on. To sum up, keeping in mind the requirements and needs of the public, emphasis should be done on the development of public
transportation
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 rather than building new railway tracks for faster running trains.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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