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The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand , it is also isolates us and encourages people not to socialize. To what extend do you agree or disagree with these statements?

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There is no doubt that these days, the
internet
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completly
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. The question is, the network makes us
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stay connected with each other no case where we are.
On the other hand
, it is
furthermore
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 society not to socialise. In
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assists
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the
 world when you are working and we can call my friends no matter where they are.
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 it. The main reason given to support
this
 claim is that in the past they did not have
internet
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 did know how they live. To illustrate, in 1950, the
internet
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connected
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the
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worldwide
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.
In other words
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without
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Moreover
, these days the worse thing make the
internet
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everything
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internet
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. It makes us did not
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learning
such
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. To sum up,
although
 between
this
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internet
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on the other hand
, as I mentioned the
internet
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especially
 on social media.
Therefore
,
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I believe
 that I prefer the
internet
,
as a result
, it makes life easier.
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