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In many countries people do not recycle their rubbish as much as they do. Why do you think this is? What can be done to change this?

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There are many countries in which citizens
reluctant
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are reluctant
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 to
recycle
 around the world
because
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ofbecause
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 the difficulty of the method
for
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of
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 recycling and the lack of strict
rule
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rules
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. In order to improve
this
 situation, it is required to describe how to
recycle
 more clearly and establish a restriction more strictly. Not understanding the way to
recycle
 completely,
people
 have a tendency to hesitate
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to contributing
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contributing
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to contribute
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 a
recycle
. Generally, consumers are likely to
avoide
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avoid
 doing something well-unknown because of
a
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the
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 difficulty to complete it.
For example
, according to the survey of
cosumer's
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consumer's
consumer
behavior
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behaviour
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, 80% of them are not willing to participate in the unfamiliar activities including a
recycle
, and it is
also
 shown that
this
 is because they may not grasp how to conduct it.
Therefore
, if a government create some materials for showing the method of a
recycle
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recycles
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, more
people
 would change their
mind
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minds
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 to
do
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apply
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a
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apply
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recycle
.
Additionally
, a lack of restriction
such
 as a
fare
 for not doing a
recycle
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recycling
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 normally increases a person who is unwilling to
recycle
 their rubbish. Citizens basically care about being charged a
fare
 based on their activities, and that affects to change
people
's
behaviors
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behaviours
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.
For instance
, there is the article that 90% of
people
 avoided spending their money
to
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on
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 a
fare
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fair
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, even if they would like to behave as what they wanted to do.
Thus
, if a
fare
 is charged to a person who
do
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does
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 not
recycle
rubbishes
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rubbish
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, a man would change his
behavior
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behaviour
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 to join in that activity. In conclusion,
although
people
reluctant
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are reluctant
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 to contribute doing a
recycle
 because of
a
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apply
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difficulty of description and a shortage of
restriction
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restrictions
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, they are likely to change
their
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apply
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that
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apply
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behavior
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behaviour
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 after improving these points.
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