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government should invest more money in science education rather than other subjects to develop to the country. Do you agree or disagree?

#government #money #science #education #subjects #country
Some individuals say that authorities must put more financing into scientific studies rather than in different areas that would help the country to evolve. I totally agree with that expression and in my point of ,view it is of great importance to give your society a chance to progress. As much as regular subjects have importance in the life of any person, none of them would compare to science and have the same effect on exploring better ways of life.
For example
 medicine- if there is a chance that some professionals from the laboratory would have more money for their project, it might help them to find the cure for cancer. Pandemic is
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 a great example of the budget going where it helped to develop a vaccine in
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 a short time and, because of that so many people are safe now from the suffering of COVID. The same impact would be in other areas, like computer science and a lot more. As for financing other ,subjects it is important too, like sports for people to be healthier and more fit, so they would live a longer and better quality of life. It was proven that doing exercises and working out on a regular basis helps the brain to work more productive, so kids who play sports in school have a bigger chance to study and get good marks. In ,
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conclusion I can say that financing science is a lot more important for development in the long term effect for every human, not just for a country.
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