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An increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. Why is this the case, and what solutions are possible?

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In recent years, the development of industrial plants has more or less affected the
environment
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 negatively.
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 issue. A dramatic increase in the human population leading to a higher demand for consumer goods is the main cause of environmental destruction. In order to serve
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 rising demand, companies continually clear land
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 cut down trees, and build more factories to manufacture more goods.
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 whole construction does not only result in deforestation but
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 release tons of carbon dioxide emission into the air, leading to climate change and catastrophic natural disasters.
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, during industrial processes, factories dispose of toxic wastes and contaminate nearby community water sources,
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 as rivers, lakes, or streams.
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 destroys biodiversity and depletes the aquatic ecosystem as contaminated water cause illness and death to fish and other animals.
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 the above-mentioned problems could not be avoided during human development, governments could take steps to mitigate the negative consequences to the Earth. Regulations and rankings are needed to assess the level of emission of each factory, and governments can take sanctions on companies that affect the
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 may help encourage businesses to apply advanced technologies to reduce their impact on the planet and use cleaner energy,
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 as solar, water or wind.
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, if automobiles in Europe countries want to operate on roads, they need to meet fully the requirements and regulations on emissions for vehicles. In conclusion, it is possible to mitigate the negative impact of humans on the natural
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 if governments and companies seriously follow the
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 protection regulations.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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