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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that thier products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

#businesses #emphasise #thier #products #development
It is true that business
companies
 now only focus on how their
products
 are up to date and will be released soon or published recently rather than concentrating on the actual usages of the
products
. In my opinion, I believe
this
 has more detrimental effects compared to the benefits that can be
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 from
this
 and delve into
this
 matter
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case
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 like
this
 has happened.
First
 of all, the main cause of
this
 phenomenon is likely to be the humans themselves due to the fact that one of the basic natures of the humans, curiosity,
make
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 them
to
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want to know about the latest
products
 of the brand they are using even though their current ones are newly intact and don't need to be replaced.
Therefore
,
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businessmen
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business men
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businessmen
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 are taking
advantages
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out
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of
this
 opportunity and one obvious example could be
the
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Apple. Most
people
 who are crazy
with
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the
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Apple always buy the new iPhone whenever it is released and the company always
emphasizing
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on
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the new look and the
lastest
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latest
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 number on the end of it in every advertisement rather than showing the new functions of the phone. By virtue of that,
people
tends
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 to forget the actual matters of the case and always
following
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 the virtual status of the
up to date
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products
.
Also
, financial constraints will be the most common problem for most
of
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the
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people
 and expenditures for necessary needs
such
 as
foods
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, living costs and bills could not
be afford
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 if
this
 trend still continues. That's why
companies
 should not be advertising not only about the newest
products
 but
also
 about the safety features for their valuable customers.
For example
, phone
companies
 should tell about the new advanced security that can prevent consumers from cyber threats and car
companies
 should focus on the new safety protocols of their
products
. In a
nut shell
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, I pen down saying that not every company is
follwing
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following
 the new trend and
people
 should choose wisely the things that they will purchase and not to base on the release date of the
products
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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