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In number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sum of money on constructing new railway line for very fast trains between cities. Others believe money should be spent on improving existing public. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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For many people around the world, the preferred mode of transportation is a high-speed rail. Commuters travelling to and from
work
 rely on
the
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safety and efficiency,
which
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 tourists appreciate the convenience and novelty that
train
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provide
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. Others believe that highways, busses and regular trains should be improved before new
high speed
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 lines are added. Safety is chief among concerns for those who travel to
work
 or school on a regular basis. If one drives a car, they have to concentrate on roads not only to avoid accidents but
also
 to prevent other drivers from causing a problem on the road. High speed-rail allows the communter to leave the driving to the professional controlling the train, allowing them to get some
work
 done while getting to
work
 safely.
In addition
, people tend to move
further
 and
further
 away from city
centers
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, where land and houses are more affordable.
High-speed
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 rail allows these commuters to travel
greater
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distance
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 in a shorter amount of time. There is a flow-on effect here
,
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 because if we can reduce the number of cars on the road, we can
also
 cut down on traffic jams and road delays.
On the other hand
,
high speed
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 trains are expensive, and some believe
this
 money could
be spend
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 on
reparing
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repairing
preparing
 motorways which are used by cars, buses and motorcycles. Another
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possibility
possiblity
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possibility
 would be to use
this
 money to build more regular
communter
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commuter
 trains and buses to service the
ever expanding
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 populations.
Moreover
, boats and ferries could benefit from a budget which focuses more on
existing
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form
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 of transport. In the end, public transport is
a
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 issue which affects us all. The taxes which we pay should
be spend
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 on the type of transport which will have the most benefit
of
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 all citizens.
In addition
, we need to take into account how much the environment is damaged by fossil, fuels and
pollutions
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.
Therefore
, I believe in order to move forward, we need to embrace the idea of
high-speed
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the high-speed
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 rail so that future
generation
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generations
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 can continue to live safely and efficiently.
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