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Since the 18th century technological advances have replaced people in the workplace.with today's technology this process is happening at a greater rate.Technology is increasinly responsible for unemployment. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

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 gets evolved, they create tools to make their
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 life easy. In Each century they achieve
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 level in technology and discovery and nowadays it is developing exponentially. Many people are thinking that
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human resources and let to unemployment. I agree with
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 we will see how
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necessity.
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automation for various reasons like height demand and production
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. In all
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human
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 are the legacy and
companies
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 are using machines to overcome
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it.
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, One company want to increase
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 production and quality. If they hire
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people
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mange
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 different minds. It will
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them,
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 if they
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cost
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 efficiency and accuracy.
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 technologies is
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 of skilled
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. Some
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are need
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 very specific
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 and if they require more human
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 in that work, they have to train other
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, it will take time and
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 if they
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the machine
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machine
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machines
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then
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 they just need to buy
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machine
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machines
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 to ramp up their production
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quickly
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 To conclude,
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technological
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 for different
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reasons
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 like demand,
cost
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 and
leak
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lack
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 of
skill
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workers
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 and
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