Write a letter to local authorities by requesting additional sports facilities for your age group in your area. Mention about the current sport facilities available. what kind of additional sports facilities should be introduced. how the new sports facilities would be a help for the people in your age group.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to request considering opening a new leisure
in our neighbourhood because
has a positive effect on the citizens of our city as a whole.
To begin
with, I would like to start by mentioning our only sports facility which has
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a single

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small football pitch, which is designed mostly for children.
, many people don't love playing or watching
sport. since we have a large empty area in Rose street, right in the city
. I suggest building a novel leisure
with modern equipment and tools,
in addition
, a pool
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the ground level would attract a lot of people. Not to mention the financial benefit,
, sports
will attract a lot of people in the middle of their age like me, and improve their physical and mental health.
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advancement in their job shall be noticed. hoping for
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careful consideration of
suggestion! yours faithfully, Ahmed Alrawi.
Submitted by Ahmedalrawi1995 on

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