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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factor contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfactions for all workers?

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one interesting topics for adult life.
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 people would have various perspectives to
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their
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their achievement. In general,
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factors,
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environment
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 promotion opportunities, pay rise, relationship with colleagues etc. After the pandemic, many people started to have a new perspective on
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, some workforce has shifted their priority.
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, which can provide work-life balance with
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 policy, which can have
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 flexible arrangement that can fully
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 their travelling hours and take care of their families. Basically, most workers might use salary or get a promotion that might be easier to quantify their
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. Of course, salary might not be an accurate
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, the level of income is a proven the abilities of workers to
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identify
idenfity
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competitive
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competitive
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 market. In conclusion, there
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. I do believe that
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 mixture of salary and emotion. Indeed, we cannot only use the pay range to
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 the level of
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 achievement, which might
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equivelent
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 each other.
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