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Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) Describe the information below and discuss the implications for dental health.

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The given line graph illustrates the acid
level
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 in the mouth after consuming sweet foods like
sugar
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 and honey and
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the probability of tooth decay
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according
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according
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its
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the
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acid
level
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. If the data show low
pH
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 values, it explains the high acid levels.
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, if the
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level
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 is under 5.5, it will probably tooth decay will occur. Overall, as can see from the line graph, after people eat the sweet foods, their acidity
level
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 will go down to under 4
pH
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level
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 in 5
minutes
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. The interesting data show that honey will recover its acidity tiers above 5.5 after 15
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.
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 after that, fruit
sugar
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 comes up in 20
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. The
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 one, if they consume cane
sugar
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, it takes more than 30
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 to exit the danger
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. To sum up, all of these sweet goods have the possibility of causing tooth decay and maybe we can avoid consuming cane
sugar
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 because of its long-time recovery to go above 5.5
pH
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level
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.
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