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Many people now undertake extreme activities from hang-gliding to mountain climbing. Why do people risk their lives in this way, and do you think this is a good trend. Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience

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There are many
activities
people
 now undertake all over the world
and
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this
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 ranges from hang-gliding to
mountain
 climbing.even though they are risky to live.
This
 essay will discuss
reasons
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 why
people
 risk their lives in doing
this
. A lot of
people
 find themselves in different competitions and one of
this
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these
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 is
mountain
 climbing. They often participate in the competition for money and other rewards attached to it, in order to meet their needs and take care of their families even though they know that it is a dangerous
activities
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activity
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, but some do not have a choice
than
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 to be a part of
this
 and
also
 make an effort to win.
Adventure
 is another reason why
people
 venture into extreme
activities
. Many
people
 just want to hang out with friends, meet new friends and connect to
people
, others want to ease their
stress
, and
this
 can come from work,
from
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marriage, families or
a
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as a
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means of getting away, other
people
also
 embark on
this
 kind of
adventure
 in other to get inspiration for a particular project at work or in their personal business. I think undertaking
this extreme
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this extreme activity
these extreme activities
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activities
 in a way is a good trend as it is a source of income
to
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for
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 the
people
 involved in
competition
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the competition
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. It is another means of easing
stress
 from work and family, it is a source of inspiration to other
people
 . An example was when I went
for
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mountain
 climbing
last
 year
October
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in October
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 in Jalingo, Taraba state at Yorro
mountain
, I went because I love
adventure
, it was
an
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a
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 holiday and everyone in my lodge needed somewhere to visit, to ease boredom and
stress
, though climbing up the
mountain
 and climbing down were
stress
 but at the end of the
adventure
 we had fun. In conclusion, I will say
people
 benefit from those extreme
activities
 and
that is
 the reason they still undertake them even though they know it is risky and dangerous to live.

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