Many people now undertake extreme activities from hang-gliding to mountain climbing. Why do people risk their lives in this way, and do you think this is a good trend. Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience

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There are many

activities

people

now undertake all over the world

and

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this

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these

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ranges from hang-gliding to

mountain

climbing.even though they are risky to live.

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essay will discuss

reasons

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the reasons

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why

people

risk their lives in doing

this

. A lot of

people

find themselves in different competitions and one of

this

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these

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mountain

climbing. They often participate in the competition for money and other rewards attached to it, in order to meet their needs and take care of their families even though they know that it is a dangerous

activities

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activity

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, but some do not have a choice

than

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but

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to be a part of

this

and

also

make an effort to win.

Adventure

is another reason why

people

venture into extreme

activities

. Many

people

just want to hang out with friends, meet new friends and connect to

people

, others want to ease their

stress

, and

this

can come from work,

from

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marriage, families or

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as a

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means of getting away, other

people

also

embark on

this

kind of

adventure

in other to get inspiration for a particular project at work or in their personal business. I think undertaking

this extreme

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this extreme activity

these extreme activities

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activities

in a way is a good trend as it is a source of income

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for

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the

people

involved in

competition

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the competition

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. It is another means of easing

stress

from work and family, it is a source of inspiration to other

people

. An example was when I went

for

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mountain

climbing

last

year

October

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in October

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in Jalingo, Taraba state at Yorro

mountain

, I went because I love

adventure

, it was

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holiday and everyone in my lodge needed somewhere to visit, to ease boredom and

stress

, though climbing up the

mountain

and climbing down were

stress

but at the end of the

adventure

we had fun. In conclusion, I will say

people

benefit from those extreme

activities

and

that is

the reason they still undertake them even though they know it is risky and dangerous to live.

Mon Jun 20 2022

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