You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter o give details of your study plans o explain why you want to get a part-time job o suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear Zoe, I hope you are doing well in Singapore. I am writing
this
letter to you as I would like you to know about my study plan
in
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National Technology University (NTU) Singapore and I want to ask you how to apply for part-time jobs.
To begin
with, it is a great chance for me to get
offer
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from
university
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the university

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in order to study
for
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apply

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Electronic -Engineering Courses as a full-time student and
this
is for
two -year
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courses. As you know, the courses and accommodation fees in Singapore are very expensive.
Therefore
, I would like to do a part-time
job
while I am studying in order to meet my basic needs. To be frank with you, I am not quite sure how to search or apply for a part-time
job
.
Moreover
, I am pretty sure that you are able to help me since you have been working
in
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there for over five years and you could give me advice
some
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job
applications that are useful especially for students to find a part-time
job
. I hope you could help me
on
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this
case and see you in the near future. Best Regards Sandar Myint
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