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The line graph depicts the number of university graduates,
Canada
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in Canada
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 from the
year
 1992 to 2007 with the range of sixty thousand to one lac sixty thousand. Overall, it is crystal clear
a
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 majority of male graduates were extremely high comparatively female degree holders. In the
year
1992
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 only 70,000 females completed the degree,
where
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whereas
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 one lac males graduated in the same
year
. A slight increase
were
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 made in 1994 in both which is 75000 female and 105,000 males. From the
year
 of 1996 to 2000 there was a steady line can be seen in both male and female group which is lower than past years.
However
, a dramatic increase was seen from 2000 to 2006 from the 72000 Degree holders to 95000 as well as male graduates increased from 105000 to almost 150,000.
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