The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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Germany's electricity generation in general and

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energy in 560

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glance, it's evident that in 560

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conventional thermals dominated the top left

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by 59.6 per cent.

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, nuclear had the 23% of all types

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and 17.4 percentage of the info had allocated to

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energy .

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with 39.3% .

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kilowatts got 23.1% at all . Coming to the bottom side, 510-kilowatt nuclear energy dominated the whole electricity generation by 76 % .

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with 13.7 % and the rest of the

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10.3 %. which had decreased significantly from 560

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massively dominated the

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getting 80.5% which they came to

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it had decreased significantly from 36.9% to 10.5% .

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had changed from 39.3% to 8.1% . The rest of the

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was slightly similar to the previous one except that solar had lost 5.2 per cent and

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which just got a very small amount of the

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