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Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own

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 of children to participate in organized
group
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controversial
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controversy over the potential impact in recent years. In my
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 the former proposition appears to be more rational.
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 conclusion. Analysing the statement and explaining
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group
 activities participation helps to better communication skill, improve thinking ability, make better power of
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concentration
 , they can learn from their
group
 mates, learn to how to behave in social life and what type of
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challenges
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 they might face. They will have more interaction power and they can express their
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view points
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 more clearly and fearless like extrovert people
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 to
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 the
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 more expressing power and can speak on stage in front of
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any hesitation. Probing ahead,
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 of the main underlying reason
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 from the fact is that the parents for the sake of their
child
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force
 them to be occupied in any type of activity in
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 free time
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 because they want their
child
 to become independent which helps them to learn how to organize their
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keep
 room clean, organize
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, and study area. With that in future for
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 studies he or she might go
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abroad they must know how to cook the food , wash clothes , iron
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clothes
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responsible
 of their belongings. To culminate , I reiterate that there are plenty of strong factors supporting the
child
 to participate in
group
 activities and become more socialise .
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 cannot be overlooked either.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • occupied
  • organized
  • group activities
  • benefits
  • social
  • teamwork skills
  • interpersonal skills
  • friendship
  • discipline
  • time management
  • interests
  • hobbies
  • independent play
  • creativity
  • problem-solving skills
  • self-reliance
  • explore
  • discover
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