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the pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000

the pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000
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The pie charts illustrate the generation of
units
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 of
electricity
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 from coal, natural gas, hydro and nuclear power in two various countries in two different
years
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, 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, in both countries, the total production of
electricity
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 increased significantly over 20
years
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 period. Coal was used as the major source of generation of
electricity
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 in Australia and France
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 hydro and nuclear power
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 used as the least source for the production of
electricity
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 in France.
According to
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 the pie charts, in Australia, coal accounted for exactly half of the total generation of
electricity
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 in the year 1980.
However
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, it rose dramatically to 130
units
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 in 2000. One-fifth
units
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 of
electricity
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 were generated from hydropower in Australia, in 1980 which was fallen to 2
units
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, in 2000.
Likewise
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, in 1980, natural gas made up 20
units
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 of
electricity
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 which declined steeply to 2
units
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 20
years
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 later.
On the other hand
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, in France,
electricity
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 produced from coal remains unchanged for both
years
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 1980 and 2000 with 25
units
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 of
electricity
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.
In contrast
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,
electricity
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 generated from nuclear power in 1980 numbered 15
units
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 which went up drastically to 126
units
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 in the year 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words units, electricity, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity production
  • Fuel source
  • Renewable sources
  • Non-renewable sources
  • Significant change
  • Evolved
  • Dominant source
  • Introduction of new sources
  • Reliance
  • Electricity production mix
  • Environmental implications
  • Future trend
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