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Fewer students are studying science at school and university, favoring more computer based subjects instead. Is it is a positive or negative development? What are reasons for this?

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In recent years, it is evidence that a majority of colleges and Universities have been shifted from the traditional
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subjects
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 to IT-based
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.
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 essay will discuss both advantages and drawbacks and explain why I think the negative impacts outweigh the positives. Undoubtedly, our lives are so dependent on technological devices and the internet which provides a considerable opportunity in career. The rise in popularity of computers and internet-based
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 is unsurprisingly in current society. Most famous or successful businesses are related to computer-based, while the media is full of stories of tech start-ups that have made their founders and investor into millionaires or even billionaires.
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, IT-based industries provide more opportunities for careers than the traditional
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 subject, which significantly attracts the students to participate in computer
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 rather than
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. It certainly seems a safer option in
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 occupation path than a career in
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, which require a longer-term commitment and significant contribution to
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 to gain more salary and social prestige.
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,
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 are fundamental and vital in the society that improves our lives. Both academic and technology development as a whole depends on a sustainable stream of talented
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, even breakdown the technological boundary to keep the devices sustainable. In the beginning, the devices and the internet were proposed by our brilliant
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, and they invented these technological items which facilitate the improvement of the community. Meanwhile, the
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 focus not only on IT-based development but
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 on the medicines, engineering technical, and improving the manufacturing process skills. More students choose to study the
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 subject means more talented participate in doing
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 invaluable work. In conclusion, the transition of the student studying the
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 to IT-based
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 is understandable, given the rising importance of technology-based jobs.
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,
scientists
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 are indispensable and vital in society.
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