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During a recent plane journey, you sat next to businessman who own a chain of restaurants, and he suggested that you should contact him about possible job in one of his stores. write a letter to this businessman

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 Salih, I am the lady who sat
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 the flight from Muscat to Dubai. I would like to apply to one of your branches here in the city as we discussed earlier. I want to apply for the position of head waiter in the Ruwi branch. Aside from the resume that I attached, I would like to point out some relevant
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 my experiences. I worked an uninterrupted three years as head waiter in the three stars Albustan Hotel. Naturally, in
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 job, I dealt with different nationalities and personality types along with every unimaginable cuisine from local to international. I am a hard worker, punctual, team worker and multi-lingual. I can speak English and Arabic fluently and conversational Spanish. I worked long enough to know what
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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