Some people think government should ban dangerous sports, such as skydiving and the rock climbing. Do you agree or disagree?

A significant number of people believe that some dangerous
sports
, say, sky diving, and
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rock
climbing should be banned. I agree with them because of two reasons.
First
of all, few
sports
are so dangerous that
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bring
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a lot of
health
issues.
Although
sky diving and
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the
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rock
climbing are extremely thrilling, they are not free from injuries and even
health
.
For instance
, a person with a weak heart can easily get cardiac arrest during playing
such
sports
.
In addition
to these, minor problems, especially,
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issues are very common while participating
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mentioned thrilling
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activities
activies
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activities
in the question prompt.
Therefore
, thrilling
sports
are not free from
health
hazards.
Secondly
, the businesses that deal with adventurous activities are out of
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government
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control. Most importantly, they do
such
unethical things and simply do not pay anything for the destruction of the environment. Take,
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rock
climbing,
for example
sometimes harms
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of the
mountians
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mountains
by disturbing the natural habitats.
Therefore
,
government
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the government
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should take
actions
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against
such
a harmful activity. To sum up,
few
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dangerous activities like sky diving and
the
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rock
climbing should be prohibited for people as it brings
health
issues and they are out of
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government interventions.
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