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Fossil fuels, such ad coal, oil and natural gas, are used in many countries. But in some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy, including wind and solar power, has been encouraged. Is this trend a positive or a negative development?

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fossil
fuels
such
 ad coal fuel and natural gas are used in several
countries
 but in some
countries
 the use of alternating
sources
 of
energy
involve
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involving
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 wind and solar
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power
pover
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power
 has been stimulate   in my
view
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,view
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its
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it's
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 a positive development for every country should use renewable
energy
soruces
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sources
  . because widely known all of
fossil
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the fossil
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fuels
 have been running out so people had better discover a new source and use it the biggest positive development is switch to renewable
sources
such
 as
wind solar
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wind-solar
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 power, and water
Furthermore
, there are lots of positive feedback
such
 as preserving climate change and
energy
 crisis. people have been adopting
moderna
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modern
 age and reach economic
sucesss
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success
 ı
cant
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can't
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 see any negative effect
perhabs
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perhaps
 it would be hard to switch
energy
 source at
first
     the best ability is
generate
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to generate
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 your own
energy
 without using fossil
fuels
. Currently, certain
countries
 have been conducting their own
energy
. we have to create our own
clear
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clean
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energy
 admittedly
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there
they
ther
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there
 are
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excellent
excelelnt
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excellent
 alternatives
for instance
 wind biomass hydropower solar
energy
 People create their own facilities for collecting alternative
energy
sources
 indiscriminately. we have to avoid using all
of
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the fossil
fuels
. we generate clean
energy
 and
countries
 take advantage of collecting renewable
energy
.    
As a result
, there are several positive effects of switching
energy
sources
 and
switch
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switching
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 to renewable
energy
sources
.
Countries
 conserve
energy
 and animals
wouldnt
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wouldn't
 be affected badly because renewable
energy
sources
dont
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don't
 cause air pollution or climate change That would be an enormous improvement for all
countries
.
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