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In my country, plastic containers have become more common than ever and are used by many food and drink companies. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Plastic
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 waste is an ongoing dilemma all over the world. In the Philippines,
plastic
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 containers are commonly used by
food
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the food
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 and beverages industry. In my opinion, frequent usage of these materials
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gives
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 more harm than benefit specifically
in
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to
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 our environment, our health and
to
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our economy.
To begin
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 with, the use of
plastic
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 containers
are
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is
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 frequently seen when people order food and have it delivered to the comforts of their homes or
in
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workplaces.
This
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 trend
further
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 accelerated at the start of the pandemic when people
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 prohibited outdoors.
Although
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platics
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plastics
 are cheap as compared to other alternatives, it is not biodegradable. It can be reused,
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, studies show
thay
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that
 it produces toxins when heated. Plastics
posses
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possess
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low
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a low
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 melting point so when it is mixed with hot items, the toxins
it
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they
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 produce from
its
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their
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 materials can be a source of poison.
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, the common sight of pollution in our oceans
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 from plastics. More and more marine creatures are greatly affected
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with
he
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the
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 influx of
plastic
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 waste in their habitat.
This
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 is
due to
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 the scarcity of land areas for garbage disposal and
as a result
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, people dump their wastes in open water. A documentary once showed a sea turtle having difficulty breathing
due to
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 a straw embedded in its nose.
This
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 poor and innocent creature had to bear the selfish attitude of human actions.
Lastly
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,
according to
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 surveys,
plastic
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 packaging can lead to several economic losses.
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 is
due to
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 the fact that plastics are not infinitely recycled as opposed to what others believe. In fact,
recycling
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the recycling
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 process of these materials
are
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 very costly.
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,
as a result
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 of
plastic
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pollutions
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pollution
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, governments have to incur costly repairs in cleaning up our marine ecosystem. In conclusion, the drawbacks of using
plastic
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 containers outweigh its benefits. It is vital for authorities to
further
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 ramp up policies on
plastic
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 usage before it givens
tremendous
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a tremendous
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 and detrimental impact
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on
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 our health, environment and
our
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apply
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economy.

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coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences to introduce each paragraph. This helps guide the reader.
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Make sure each main point is fully developed with supporting details. This strengthens your argument.
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Consider using more specific examples to illustrate your points. This makes your ideas more convincing.
coherence and cohesion
Check for grammar and spelling errors. These can distract from your message.
coherence and cohesion
Vary your vocabulary to avoid repetition. This will make your writing more engaging.
task achievement
Your essay clearly states your opinion and presents a clear argument.
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You have addressed important issues related to plastic use, showing good understanding of the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • versatile
  • lightweight
  • durable
  • hygienic
  • environmental impact
  • pollution
  • landfills
  • recycling
  • reusable
  • sustainable
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