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The most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

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Accupation
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Occupation
 and profession contribute to human
fulfillment
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 over the history of human beings. The most obvious and important parameter which impacts
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everyone'
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everyone
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 s life is payment
,
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 while reaching
an
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 satisfying
situation
 in a
job
 is
actually
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complex
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 and not
abstract
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 issue. In the following, both
of
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concerns are discussed and I give my opinion about them as clear as possible. It is
undoubtable
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undoubtedly
 that salary and other
interest
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 of a
job
 could be more likely considered as the
first
 priority of any worker who is seeking a
job
 position.
Besides
, the
second
 important factor, which plays a vital role to fulfill an individual, is the matter that how much a
job
 and
work space
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 fit with an
employee' s
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 nature. According to the
last
 study performed at Razi
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University
Universiy
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University
, financial and mental insecurity have had the most negative effect on workers in 5
Europian
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 countries since 2010. Generally speaking, workers are able to perform most efficiently as long as they have no
distraction
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specially
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which
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 are rooted
from
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 financial concerns and
emotional
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 tensions of a work atmosphere.
On the other hand
, the world is still struggling with inequality, so we always see
unbearable
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the unbearable
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situation
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through
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 the world some
low level
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 workers have to face to make a living. Unfortunately, human beings have not won to overcome
this
 problem yet.
In particular
, In terms of
financial
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, physical and mental
situation
, It is inevitable,
therefore
, some part of
this
 population have to endeavour unsatisfied work
situation
.
However
, some prefer to deal with
such
situation
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 to get enough experience and knowledge rather than start working in a field in which there is no promising prospective. All in all, a worker often personally
prioritize
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 the needs causing
he
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 or
she
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 to feel more comfortable. On top of them,
financial
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situation
 of a person can show how well he
lives
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, while some parameters are out of touch so that some have to live
under
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bad
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situation
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job satisfaction
  • wellbeing
  • contribute
  • meaningful work
  • work-life balance
  • career progression
  • workplace environment
  • recognition
  • constructive feedback
  • compensation
  • benefits
  • job security
  • autonomy
  • skills match
  • interests match
  • variety
  • challenge
  • economic conditions
  • labor market
  • individual expectations
  • job role
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