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With divorce rates and family breakdowns increasing globaly, it is generally accepted that families today are not as close as they used to be. Discuss the causes of this problem and offer some possible solutions to it.

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It is undoubtedly true that a distance between family members has brought prominent problems to mankind's life in recent decades. What is significant is the fact that divorce rates and family breakdowns have increased significantly. The following essay tends to explore two primary causes and solutions (
such
 as) (regarding these issues
such
 as) social
media
 and being too busy as well as listening to an expert relationship counsellor. It is undoubtedly true that social
media
 have separated family members significantly which causes a lack of sympathy and corrupts the family's atmosphere. Social
media
 was the best invention of mankind,
However
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 it is the main reason for family separations. Nowadays, most families spend most of their
time
 on social
media
 chatting with their friends
instead
 of having a word with their family members. As an illustration, think about a father who spends most of his
time
 on social
media
 over breeding his children. It is evident that those children have no one to protect them against any danger,
eventually
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 those children may get corrupted by drugs,bad friends and so on.
In addition
, nowadays due to work hours and high expenditures, families don't spend enough
time
 with each other. Alternatively, they start getting apart and
at
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 the
end
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 their relationship dies.
Further
 and even more importantly, a councillor or a family member with huge influence can solve the family's problems and reinforce their relationship. Councillors are taking an important action toward parents. The main point is, that sometimes there are many unsaid speeches which bother the father and mother of the family .An expert adviser will help them to understand each other better and solve their major problems with mere talking. By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm that these distances are needed to be solved immediately,
otherwise
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 everyone will be damaged somehow. It is recommended that councillors allocate
time
 to reinforcing families' relationships.
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