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unpaid social service in the free time of teenagers

The introduction of unpaid social
service
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 in the free time of teenagers has been a perennial subject of debate. I agree with
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service
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.
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, teenagers will get the actual meaning of wholehearted
service
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 to the public
instead
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 of always wandering behind money.
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, the challenges encountered by different sections of people are identified in the society, which helps in increasing their levels of maturity, in
turn
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enables
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 them to tackle the similar things in their lives.
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, in India, there are organizations like the National
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 Scheme (NSS) that
recruits
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students
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in
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 their summer vacation and assign them
in
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 public places
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 as government schools, hospitals and
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. I feel grateful to be a part of
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 organization
in
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 the entirety of my student life.
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, due to their involvement, various problems faced in
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society can be identified. Assisting the community helps in reducing some of these issues.
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, one of the most common
challenge
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 faced in some countries is the look after
of
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old people.
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, the
service
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 provided by the
students
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 helps them to satisfy their daily needs and
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, the interaction between them helps
students
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 to imbibe some moral values.
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, some of the major issues that are identified can be taken to the awareness of political leaders of their corresponding locality. To conclude, all the
students
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 should be encouraged to participate in unpaid social work
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 their holidays. There will be
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 of community and
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, it helps them to learn
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ethics and moral values.

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