Some say that it would be better if the majority of employees worked from home instead of travelling to a workplace every day. Do you think the advantages of working from home outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays,
lifestyle
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of the people has changed completely
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past. With new innovations and the development of
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modern
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technology
technolgy
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technology
, people have many alterations to continue their professional
career
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. Most of the population is willing to
work
from home as each and every
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have
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internet and
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electronic
facilities at present.
However
, there are advantages as well as disadvantages
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this
concept. Recently,
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world is facing an economic
down-fall
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downfall
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after
covid
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the covid
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pandemic.
As a result
per-capita income is decreasing and expenditure per person is drastically increasing.
for
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people cannot bear the
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transportation
fee, price of the daily needs and even the college and university
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expenses
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expences
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.
Moreover
due to the fuel crisis,
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population
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more difficulties to report for the
work
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affects punctuality too.
Furthermore
, the mentality of the employees has
damaged
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. So efficiency and productivity of the
work
are
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. It is considered to be another great disadvantage.
In contrast
, there are many
advantageswhen
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advantages when
men
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and women are working from home.
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they do not want to spend time and money unnecessarily on roads, searching for transport and no need to be at ques to get fuel for vehicles. So it is
financialy
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financially
benifited
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benefited
.
Also
as their minds are relaxed,
work
-coordinated competence
become
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increased. In conclusion, employees are key to
a
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success in a certain country. So the government should be
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focused
forcused
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forced
on providing
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relevant
relevent
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relevant
facilities to them. As all we know each coin has two sides, there are plus and minus aspects
of
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this
problem. In my opinion, I think, it will be a good decision, if
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''
work
from home'' concept is stabilized.
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