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Nowadays more people are choosing to live with friends or alone rather than with their families. This trend is likely to have a negative impact on communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

#people #friends #families #trend #impact #communities
I disagree with
this
 opinion because living with friends or alone can have
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 of
benefit
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.
First
 of all,your schedule of the day will be comfortable,you can wake up whenever you want or sleep whenever you like and it won't affect anyone,
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 your commute time varies you can do night shifts and sleep in the morning,you can organize a sleepover party at your house .
Second
,you will understand the value of the money if you live alone all the bills of your house will be paid by you by
then
 you will be under a lot of pressure because of money,you will have to work harder to make money if you want to go shopping or travel .And
last
 you will have to learn to do housework like cooking,
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 your bed,
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 the dishes,... knowing how to do all of that can help you
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progress
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progess
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progress
 in life and make you a better person
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Erosion
  • Communal cohesion
  • Geographical dispersion
  • Interpersonal relationships
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Real estate dynamics
  • Psychological well-being
  • Technological facilitation
  • Independence
  • Traditional vs modern lifestyles
  • Intergenerational relationships
  • Virtual communities
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