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In some countries, people prefer to rent a house than buy one. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a property?

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Some
people
 like to stay in
the
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rental apartments whereas others prefer to have their own. It depends on the individual choices and the requirements.
This
 essay will describe both the merits as well as
demerits
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the demerits
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 of renting a
house
. Nowadays, it is very common that
people
 have to migrate to different countries with respect to their work.
Hence
, pertaining to
this
 one of the major
advantage
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advantages
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 of renting a
house
 is its ease and convenience.
For instance
, in the present
times
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 if a person needs to relocate to some other place, it is very easy to rent a fully furnished apartment online only with all the amenities.
Moreover
, owning a personal home requires a lot of maintenance whereas in the case of rental
property
 it has to be taken care of by the owner. To illustrate, in a survey, conducted in the urban areas of Korea, most of the
people
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preferred
preffered
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preferred
 to have rental apartments as the problems arising with concern to electricity, water supply or any repairs are handled by the
property
 owners.
Therefore
, renting a home makes
life
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 of
people
more
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easier and simpler.
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks
also
such
 as a
people
 spend a lot of money from their monthly income
in
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 paying the rent and still the
property
 does not belong to them. The best example of
this
 can be seen in countries in the middle east where
expats
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 are not allowed to purchase the
property
,
however
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 they spend a huge sum of their income
in
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 paying rent.
Moreover
, owning a personal home gives a sense of security which can not be attained by renting an
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apartment
apartmnet
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apartment
.
For instance
, in most of the countryside regions in India
people
 have their own houses and for
them
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 it is an asset which can be helpful in any bad financial circumstances.
Hence
, having
ones
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 own
house
 provides
a
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financial security
which
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 the rental ones can never
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fulfil
fullfill
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fulfil
. To conclude, renting a
house
 has both the advantages as well as disadvantages. It depends upon the personal choice of an individual whether to opt for rental or to
have
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own
property
.
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