Reading story books is better for children than watching television or playing computer games.Do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays,
children
are spending time with technology more and reading
books
. It makes
kids
become
unoutstanding
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un outstanding
students in the class.
This
is not a good habit for
kids
all around the world. I strongly agree with
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that reading
story
books
is better for
children
than watching television or computer games. In fact, reading
story
books
help
children
to improve
reading
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their reading
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and
also
vocabularies
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. Of course, reading is very important for
children
. It
also
helps them to become a good reader and know more new
words
and
another classmates
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.
For example
,
story
books
use many different
words
when
kids
misunderstanding
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about
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the
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those
words
they will
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it
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them
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down and
trying
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to understand
about
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the meaning.
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, they know many
words
and
reading
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faster
from
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day
by
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day. In
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addiction
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, reading
story
books
makes them remember
than
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another students
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because
of
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their's
brain
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is working
everyday
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. As we have known that many successful people are created
from
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by
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the reader
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reader
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readers
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.
Thus
, reading
story
books
are helping
kids
a
lots
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. In conclusion, reading
story
books
, watching television or playing games
it
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is not
effect
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for
children
. Some
kids
also
can be
a
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good
reader
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readers
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if they know how to control their time.
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