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Reading story books is better for children than watching television or playing computer games.Do you agree or disagree.

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Introduction
Nowadays,
children
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 are spending time with technology more and reading
books
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. It makes
kids
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 become
unoutstanding
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un outstanding
 students in the class.
This
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 is not a good habit for
kids
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 all around the world. I strongly agree with
topic
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 that reading
story
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books
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 is better for
children
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 than watching television or computer games.
Body paragraph 1
In fact, reading
story
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books
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 help
children
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 to improve
reading
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their reading
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 and
also
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vocabularies
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. Of course, reading is very important for
children
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. It
also
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 helps them to become a good reader and know more new
words
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 and
another classmates
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another classmate
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.
For example
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,
story
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books
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 use many different
words
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 when
kids
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misunderstanding
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misunderstand
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about
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apply
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the
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those
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 they will
noted
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note
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it
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them
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 down and
trying
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try
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 to understand
about
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the meaning.
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, they know many
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 and
reading
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read
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 faster
from
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day
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to
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 day.
Body paragraph 2
In
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addition
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addiction
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addition
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, reading
story
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books
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 makes them remember
than
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another students
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another student
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 because
of
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their's
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brains
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 is working
everyday
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every day
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. As we have known that many successful people are created
from
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by
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the reader
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reader
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readers
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.
Thus
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, reading
story
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books
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 are helping
kids
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 a
lots
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.
Conclusion
In conclusion, reading
story
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books
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, watching television or playing games
it
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is not
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effective
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 for
children
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. Some
kids
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also
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 can be
a
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apply
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good
reader
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readers
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 if they know how to control their time.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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