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Societies that don’t respect and honour their women can never make progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Women
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 play a remarkable role in
society
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. In my point of view, advocating feminism can improve a civilization.
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, most
women
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 are or will be mothers of the future generations in
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. They influence children's personalities and upbringing.
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, societies have to provide a peaceful atmosphere to make them ready for doing their duties as mothers. It will be a kind of investment which guarantees the prosperity of the future community.
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, respecting females raises their self-esteem. They struggle to enhance their social status and contribute to the economical sector as professionals.
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,
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 a
society
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 will have economical development . At
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 but not least, in countries where
women
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 are
behaved
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 unequally compared to men;
women
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 become depressed in the long term as their value as a member of a
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 has been ignored.
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women
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 look for places to recover their value. In some ,cases they may think of migration to another country. So, the country will lose some of the workforce and professionals. In conclusion,advocating feminism will contribute to the development of nations while disrespecting
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 will deteriorate the future of a community.

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