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Most schools are planning to replace sports and exercise with more academic sessions. How will this change affect children's lives in your opinion?

#schools #sports #exercise #sessions #change #children #lives
It is certainly true that pupils are the future of
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tomorrow
tommorrow
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tomorrow
 and an education play
significant
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 role to make their career bright. It is generally claimed that at present
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educational institutions are changing physical
activities
 into other subjects in the educational curriculum. I think
this
 is a negative development as it has
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effect
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effects
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 on students which
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 will substantiate
further
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To begin
,with sinister effects of having no sports activity in learners syllabus. If
student
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 does not have
games
 in their schedule,
then
 they would spend sedentary life since they will sit long hours in a class in front of laptops without doing any exercise.
Consequently
, they will face myriad issues in their life
such
 as depression as well as suffer from
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 obesity disease.
For instance
, In developing countries like India
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 schools do not allow physical exercises in the learning institutes which
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results
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 Indian students do not perform well in
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.
Moreover
,
students
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 hidden
talent
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 are not exposed
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 other
activities
 like the soccer and rest of
games
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.
This
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the teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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 just
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 on study rather than sports. There are numerous pupils who have
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 to become
athlete
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,
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 if
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the school
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school
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schools
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 have special time for
games
activities
,
then
 these children can learn new techniques in a game and get
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 for their nation in future.
For example
, Countries like Japan propel their youngsters for physical
activities
 during their school time so that they can win medals for nations in
games
 like
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 Olympics.
According to me
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, I am convinced that teenagers must have one break in school to relax
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mind
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 and divert more attention to
studies
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. In conclusion, it is learning academics must add physical
activities
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 their timetable to overcome various issues like depression and
also
 find another talent like sportsperson in
pupil
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the pupil
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.
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