Many young people today know more about international pop and movie stars than about famous people in the history of their country. What is the reason for this? What can be done to increase young people's interest in famous people in the history of their country?

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, young
people
working or studying in a
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stressful
environment than
ancient
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times.
However
, they spent more time with
pop-music
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or
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films
filims
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films
for
entertainments
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. So that
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well known about all the famous
people
associated with music or
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film
than historical
people
, my suggestions to overcome
this
will be entitled in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
,
the
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history is only the part of studies in schools, not more than that.
Besides
, our educational system is well
equiped
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equipped
with professional courses which
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used to get jobs. Our
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don't want to spend more time to know about the
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historical
heroes.
For example
, based on the Indian civilization, many
people
like Mahatma Gandhi, Sree Narayan Guru, Raja ram mohanrai and Ayyan kali are some of the famous personalities who
involved
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in the recreation of India after
indepentance
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independence
. So many
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