Many people argu that in order to improve educational quality, high school students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism on their teachers. Other think it will lead to loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your Opinion.

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because it tuch our kids' success.

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sector is

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for progress. Nowadays, people think that pupils'

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. In my point of view, I strongly disagree with the idea that

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that criticism is a huge topic that needs

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in high

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their emotions.

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students

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. During high school

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teachers

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. There are many rules we need to follow to come up with reasonable judgement

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criticism

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it takes many courses to understand the point behind it. It is

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valuable subject if we follow the right rules to

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someone's work. As I guess high

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students

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is to be profistiohinal and to avoid

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by your emotion. To

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Education

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system is essential in our life, So to improve it we need experts who have enough knowledge and experience to give their

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to humanity. We should show respect and appreciation to those people.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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5Word repetition
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Many people argu that in order to improve educational quality, high school students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism on their teachers. Other think it will lead to loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your Opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not the local people. Why is this case and what can be attract more local people to visit this places

An America film actor John Wayne once said: “Tomorrow is the most important thing in life.” How is it important for individuals and countries/societies to think about the future rather than focus on the present only?

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