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Many people argu that in order to improve educational quality, high school students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism on their teachers. Other think it will lead to loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your Opinion.

#people #argu #quality #school #students #comments #criticism #teachers #loss #respect #discipline #classroom
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distinctive
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theoretical
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based on
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, it is almost impossible to emerge the new ideas. The main reason behind lies is that
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, given the research and development rates around the world, it is clear that the
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teachers
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 produce the different sights, are ahead of other
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 which they do not own. Another fact is that the reciprocal interaction between
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social capabilities. Eventually, it is a well-known matter that an individual, who passed through
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high quality
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 system which allowed to question the wondered points,
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empathy
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strict discipline conditions, in general, it is not expected
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 to criticize the
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is mentioned
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, it is a pervasive belief that being lost the teacher's charism by
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 is perceived as the loss
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or
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 state authority. To recapitulate,
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 is not a military service
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 the hierarchy plays an important role,
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 should carry the meaning that the
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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