A friend of yours is thinking of going to a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: *Explain why you think your friend would enjoy camping holiday *describe some possible disadvantages *say whether you would like to go on camping with your friend this summer

Dear Preeti, I hope
this
letter finds you in good health. I was very
when
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happy when
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I heard that you are going on a camping holiday for the first time
this
summer. I think
this
trip will prove amazing for you as Dehradun is a very mesmerizing place. You will feel relaxed because of trekking in
mountains
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the mountains
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.
Also
,
this
will be a stress-buster for you if you explore
this
place.
Although
it is a
very
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wonderful idea to visit the city
yet
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I'm a little bit worried that you have to walk in the mountains and it can be quite difficult for you because of an injury to your right leg. So, please inquire in advance whether medical aid is available in case of need. I
also
wish to join you in the camp.
However
, I could not accompany you
due to
an important project in my office. But, I want you to fully enjoy your vacations over there. Pay regards to your family from my side. Regards, Kuljeet Kaur.
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tone
Increase the level of formality in the greeting and closing to match the task requirement.
task achievement
The response addresses the task requirements but lacks detailed explanation and development of ideas.
coherence and cohesion
The writing lacks clear organizational structure and coherence in presenting ideas.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary and demonstrate more sophistication in language use.
grammatical range
Make use of a wider range of sentence structures and demonstrate more control over grammar.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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