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Some people prefer to work same job throughout thier life while others like to change jobs . Give you opinion.

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Nowadays, there is
tendency
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 for most people to retain the same occupation while others would want to shift to a new
job
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 with, the ones who would want the same
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 throughout their life, choose to, because they are afraid of change. These people have been in their profession all throughout their entire life and introducing
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 things would make them feel anxious
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 the situation.
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 would result
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being
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 unstable in whatever they will have to undergo.
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, I have seen employees continue the same
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 because they are satisfied
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 their work and they see nothing else they would do aside from their original work.
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, these individuals keep up with their
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, perhaps, they are entitled to better benefits
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 as salary, insurance and healthcare. Nurses,
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, who are working overseas, tend to keep their profession mainly for the reasons that they receive better remuneration and benefits.
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, some would opt to change their current
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 is because these people are very much thrilled to experience new
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 and they view life
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 a wider perspective. In my experience, have seen individuals getting accustomed to new opportunities and challenges.
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. In conclusion, there are positive attributes one can get with changes that might come and it can greatly be beneficial to the individual.
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