The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010
The chart shows a comparison between 2002 and 2010 years of
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computer
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it shows a constant through the years. 2002 was the year with few computer ‘ownerships than 2010. Add a comma
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By comparing 2002 and 2010 a low educational Change the spelling
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For instance
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, in 2002 there was only 70 percent
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. For example
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