Some people believe that the fast pace and stress of modern life is having a negative effect on families. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is currently a contentious argument over whether the high speed and pressure of contemporary lifestyle are having a negative effect on families. From my point of view, I
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problem because the hectic whirlwind of daily activity can lead to tension in life, creating a family gap.
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reason that I agree
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humans
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spend less time gathering with relatives. In the technical era, the demand for economic growth is requested
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work productivity and time.
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, adults work for long hours or do more than one job and children learn from morning to night.
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, it takes everyone
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to reunite with parents, leading to a lack of social interaction among families.
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, everyone
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to surf
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to relax, focusing on their job
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of confiding with their parent.
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, another reason why I support
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the pressure of lifestyle can lead to tension which causes
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relatives. In a society where money is essential, due to
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, everyone
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a conflict.
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, work overload leads to stress for people so it makes an invisible breakdown. The relationship
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gradually goes down. In conclusion, I totally
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idea because of the harm of the fast pace and stress of modern society.
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modern life requires many things, no one should forget that love and family affection is above all.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern life
  • fast pace
  • stress
  • negative effect
  • family bonds
  • working hours
  • conflicts
  • advancements in technology
  • distract
  • family time
  • financial pressures
  • living standards
  • strain
  • individuals
  • family activities
  • traditions
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