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You have seen an ad in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months, and look after their six-year-old child

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter in response to your advertisement published in the magazine Child
care
.
Currently
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 I am studying at
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university
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the universit
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universit
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university
 of Melbourne, and since
the
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apply
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Covid hit the country most of my classes are online. I would like to have
this
 job so I can take
care
 of my expenses
of
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studies
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my studies
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. Since I am
elder
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an elder
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 child of my family
,
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 and have experience
of
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 taking
care
 of younger children. Both my parents used to work while my siblings were young, and I was the one who took
care
 at that time. I am
also
 cool by nature, so I will take
care
 of your children with utmost sincerity. I am
also
 very friendly, so I hope your child will love my company. Since I am studying, so I will get free time only on weekends and I would like to visit some beautiful places around the country. If you don't mind, I would like your family to join me during these trips.
Also
, I am a huge fan of cricket and might join some cricket
club
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 as well if I get more free time. Thank you for your consideration. I will look forward to hearing from you.
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Yours
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Your
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 faithfully, Asim Bhojani
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