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You have seen an ad in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months, and look after their six-year-old child

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter in response to your advertisement published in the magazine Child
care
. I am studying at
university
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the university
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 of Melbourne, and since COVID hit the country most of my classes are online. I would like to have
this
 job so I can take
care
for
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 the expenses of my studies. Since I am the elder child of my family and have experience in taking
care
 of younger children. Both my parents used to work while my siblings were young, and I was the one who took custody at that time. I am
also
 cool by nature, so I will take
care
 of your children with utmost sincerity. I am
also
 very friendly, so I hope your child will love my company. Since I am studying, so I will get free time only on weekends and I would like to visit some beautiful places around the country. If you don't mind, I would like your family to join me during these trips.
Also
, I am a huge fan of cricket and might join a cricket club as well if I get more free time. Thank you for your consideration. I will look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Asim Bhojani
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