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You have seen an ad in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months, and look after their six-year-old child

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter in response to your advertisement for a
baby sitter
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 posted in the magazine
Child
Care
. I am doing Bachelor’s in Psychology at Melbourne University and since the pandemic has hit the country my classes are completely online. I would like to have
this
 job so that I can take
care
 of my expenses while I am studying here. Since I am the eldest
child
of
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 my family, I am quite experienced in taking
care
 of children. Both my parents used to work while my siblings were young and I was the one who took
care
 of them.
In addition
, I am a cool person by nature and will take
care
 of your
child
 with utmost sincerity. I am quite friendly as well and your
child
 will enjoy my company. Since I am studying, I will get free time only during weekends and
then
 I would like to visit some beautiful places around the city. If you don’t mind, I would love your family to join me on these trips.
Also
, I am a huge cricket fan and I might as well join a cricket club if I get more free time. Thank you for your consideration. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Faithfully, Raju
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